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<Lissyyy™ In Wonderland>
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So we're doing coursework on Frankenstein, and I tend to ramble loads.

We had to write a 200 word summary, and I ended up doing 298, not knowing this would be used for our introduction to the coursework. Its far too long! And I really need some help to shorten it, or to write the same sorta thing but in less words...

Anyone be able to help? I'd appreciate it loads.
 
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Hmmm....We'd kind of need to see what you've done so far Missy Lissy.

It's working blind without that.


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<Lissyyy™ In Wonderland>
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Yeah, I know that lol. But like I didn't wanna post it and scare everyone off lol.

So this is what I've done tonight...


The book Frankenstein is an account of Victor Frankensteins life, the story is narrated by a British sailor, Robert Walton. His story begins with his domestic life, back in Geneva and the young orphan Elizabeth, who becomes part of the Frankenstein family. Victor has a great interest in Science, which takes him to the university in Ingolstadt.
While at the university Frankenstein becomes obsessed with genetics, and creating a perfect human. He makes a creation out of dead tissue, and brings this creation to life. Once he is alive, he is horrified by what is infront of him and he runs from it. Victor suffers a physical and mental breakdown, from which his good friend Henry Clerval nurses him back to good health.
The creation has disapeared, and Victor recieves a letter from his Father informing him of his youngest brother, Williams murder. When Victor arrives in Geneva he catches a glimpse of the creation, and he immediatly knew that he was responsible for the murder. A family friend of Victor was falsely accused and found guilty, Victor becomes guilt ridden and seeks respite in the alps.

Excuse any spelling mistakes and what not.

And this is the last paragraph of my summary which I need to write into that somehow, but shorter...

The creation asks Victor one thing; if he could have a friend of the oposite sex, someone who was as ugly and repulsive as himself. Victor reluctantly agrees, he finds it a loathsome task and doesn't fulfill it. The creation who had promised Victor if he didn't make him a friend, he would punish him and he would suffer at the hands of his family, and that he would be there on his wedding night. And on his wedding night, Elizabeth is strangled. Victor devotes his life to the destruction of the monster and eventually dies.
 
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200 words is only a guide you know



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But 98 words is really far over it, and it wasn't very good.

And I need to add more into the intro.

I really wanna get a good mark on this, I only got a C in my last piece of coursework, and I'm worried I'll get moved down a set!
 
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In Occys opinion,he likes what you've written.

As a younger lad, when called upon to shorten a piece of work, Octavian would first start with the transitional or non essential words....eg...."the first line could be re-written as "Frankenstein is an account of Victor Frankensteins life, and is narrated by a British sailor, Robert Walton"....3 words down.

It's better to get all these words out of the way first as you want to take out as little of the main collaterall as possible. Think of it as a lean piece of muscle....no wastage at all....no fat at all.

In a summary every word possible should count.

Once you've done that you may only have half of the words left to delete.


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In conclusion....summary pieves need not be so conversational...they can be more matter of fact and straight to the point.

That's why their summaries.


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Summaries are too hard for me, I don't like doing sentences that start with 'Frankenstein is an...' etc.

I think the length it is now, is okay I just need to add the rest of the story in it. :\
 
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You need to get out of the habit of doing full explanatory sentences for summaries. Words are too valuable to waste on that sort of sentence. For the purpose of your piece of work things like "This book" are wasted as it's a given that you're refering to the book. Anything that you wirte will be taken in the context of the book.

With only 200 words each one is like gold dust.

There are plenty more that you could strip out.


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Yeah, I spose I do.

But I could of been discussing the film. Ninja

English is too damn hard. Frown
 
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thank the dear lord im done with the confuzzlement of english lessons, i praise you for your hardwork lissy Big Grin


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I cant help Frown

The last one was easyer Frown




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I did 400 and something words for that, and she didn't even read it.

And now we only have till Friday to finish it. :|

She's evilllll.

But I do like English.

What last one Ray?
 
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The one about Uptown Girls




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TIL FRIDAY? THAT IS ONE EVIL TEACHER YOU GOT! ooh sorry bout the caps


I ♥ movies & getting caught in the rain, just hold back on the pina colada Big Grin
There's nothing more sexy than a time travelling glasses wearing time lord Wink lol

There's nothing that can't be solved with a little rock salt, a gun and Sam & Dean, oh yeah! Wink
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Oh yeahhh.

But that wasn't coursework. Razz

She never even marked that. Roll Eyes
 
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Yep till Friday, cos we've got work experience next week so she was like its gotta be done by Friday. Its so unfair, cos we only started it the lesson before today.
 
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coursework sucks, i got an assignment due in on thurs, must start it tmorrow lol


I ♥ movies & getting caught in the rain, just hold back on the pina colada Big Grin
There's nothing more sexy than a time travelling glasses wearing time lord Wink lol

There's nothing that can't be solved with a little rock salt, a gun and Sam & Dean, oh yeah! Wink
Fanatical about Torchwood & Jack/Ianto-because stopwatches can be VERY fun!
 
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<Lissyyy™ In Wonderland>
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Coursework really does suck!

It doesn't just suck it sucks...Wink
 
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Oh yeahhh.

But that wasn't coursework. Razz

She never even marked that. Roll Eyes


Eek

how rude!




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I know! It was very rude.
 
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I like it Lissy


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You would Katie, you woulddddddd.

Razz
 
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