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the marriage between guy and caroline takes place, and mac is left there staring as they get into the wedding car, and u think its typical mac, not being more spontaneus, and letting her go... then you see guy and caro in the back of the car, and the driver is revealed to be.... MARTIN! hes kidnapped them cos he feels he never had a look in with caro. then u get a shot of mac on the roof of the car, and he lets himself in through the sunroof... (bare with me here...) and then martin jumps, swerved and everyone is kinda surprised to see each other, as both martin and mac must of felt they were taking control... anyways, martin swerves... goes through a fence... ploughes onto field...nearly hits a sheep... think u know whats coming next ;]

so they're all left on the cliff, the major players and maybe we get a look of dibelief on martins face, left on a cliff for the THIRD time!! i dont know, maybe sue attached herself to the bottom of the car as well, (sideshow bob style) and the final shot, has everyone in the car shouting at each other, arguing over who 'gets' caro, but the closing shot is of sue white, under the car cackling away, spanner in hand...perhaps suggesting she causes all the
cliffhangers...

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Should i make this into a proper alternative ending? I have experiance in script writing, and in conversation dialouge... is the idea good enough for me to write a full script?

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Its perfect! write away; script monkey!
i love it! i think it might be worth looking into
I like it, but ill post my ideas bellow, to imrpove it
Its needs more developing before you write a script
Your idea is rubbish. Go home

 
 
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Sounds gooooooooood


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obviously i voted for ''its perfect'' just to give it a chance! Big Grin nah i think it needs some developing, and would appreciate ideas from some other fans, make it a real challenger to the real ending. in fact, i know peopl at my college, doing drama might like to renact it, or some of you guys could help. i think we should kidnap julian as a starting point...
 
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and SM.....then give me a few hours alone with them both, and we'll start after that Razz


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naughty naughty! Eek perhaps they'll be worn out for the shoot though? Ninja
 
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yeah thats true, give them a couple days to recover before then Razz


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Make sure you put in a scene where we find out Mac isn't dying!!!! PLEASE!!!
 
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ok, this is a pretty rushed version, just to nail down what id like to see happen, and have a little bit of dialouge in it too, i'll make it much better, but what do you think so far?

If there are any objections to this marriage, speak now; or forever hold your peace...
[camera fixes fans round martin, sues, and finally macs faces, who all twitch a little]
Vicar: Do you take this man to be your lawfully wedded husband?
caroline: I do
vicar: Gay secretan do you take this woman to be your lawfully wedded wife?
guy: its GUY secretan you KNOB!!!
vicar: ah, sorry GUY secretan [winks] - do you take this woman to be your lawfully wedded wife?
guy: [girtted teeth] i do
vicar: [jubilantly] i now pronounce you - man and wife!
[wedding music plays - the kinks: you really got me. guy+caroline walk down the isle, and mac stares after them, makes to chase after them, but holds back, turns around, and sinks his head into his arms]
[outside the church, guy and caroline walk towards the wedding car]
guy: [under his breathe] do ya like that ginger man... i win, hippy tosspot...
caroline: what?
guy: ermmmm... i love you?
[they step into the wedding car. sighs of relief from both guy and caroline that they finally made it]
[shot of the driver; its martin! who has decided to kidnap them as he never felt caroline gave him a chance]
caroline:well, despite all the setbacks, we finally made it guy... for the first time in my life, i feel normal, everthing has gon to plan! no hicups or ANYTHING!
[now a shot of mac, on the sunroof]
guy: caroline? [sheepish] you have made me the happiest man alive...
caroline: guy... theres somthing ive been meaning to tell you...
[interupted, mac drops through the open sunroof]
guy: WHAT!
[martin swerves off the road into a field]
caroline: [SCREAMS]
martin: what are YOU doing here!!
mac: well, what are YOU DOING here?!
guy: you just cudnt let it go, COULD you?!
everyone: SHEEEEEEEEEEEEP!!!!!
[martin swerves again, out of control, aprroaches cliff, back of wedding car hangs on edge]
martinRed Faceh for goodness sake
guy:now look what u done pixie boy!
martin:this is so not happening.
mac: caroline, this may not seem the most convieniant of times to say this.....
guy:dont you DARE, she mine!
martin: dont i get a say in this?
mac, guy and caroline: NO!!!
[camera panning out of the ambulance]
mac: caroline.... i love you....
guy:no he doesn't, dont listen to him caroline, hes...... joking.....
[wedding car teeters back]
everyone: AAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRGHGHGGGHHGHH
[unaudible squabling between mac, guy, martin and caroline]
[camera pans slowly to bottom of ambulance]
[sue white, dressed in all black, holding a spanner.....]
sue white: your all mine, my pretties all MIIIIIIINNNNEEEE [cackles madly]
[camera pans away from the car, to the sound of cackling sue, and the music they played in the real ending, whatever that was...]

one final surprise.....

a camera shot of a letter to mac on his dressing room table that hes decided not to bring to wedding..... its basicly a letter from the doctor saying hes not really dying blah de blah de blah, just read how you want mac to survive, [as we all do!!!] so i add this little scene at the end!

hmmm a little messy, this draft, but it IS just me coming up with ideas, tell me what you think!
 
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That's lots better - give Mummy a hug!!!
 
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Love the Sue White thing, with a bit tidying up it will be great! Smile


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love it!


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EXCELLENT!!!

im studying drama and we have to do alot of script work and you my friend are very talented! is it something you would consider going into?


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certainly, i LOVE writing, poetry, scrips, short stories, journo work. i just get a kick out of expressing my thoughts through word! i like playing with melodies in garageband on mac [holy] os x , then marrying it to my poetry...

i love my mac mini - i called him dr mac Big Grin
 
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oh, who voted for ''your idea is rubbish. go home.'' outa interest... is it really that bad?!

*sits in corner and cries*
 
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BUMP! post your thoughts and your endings ppl!
 
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Hear u go terry its probably rubbish but hey.
i really like yours!
it'll probably need someone who is better than spelling and grammar than me 2 make it legible.This continues after the special

Caroline is sprawled out across the double bed(same room as in the special)
*Knocking at the door*
Caro:what, urg, oh boll**cking sh**itbags
SW(from outside door):miaow
C:wot(gets up to go to door)
SW crawls in on hands and knees and rubs round carolines legs.
C:go away im getting marr...
SWRazzurrs
C:go away leave me alone ive gota get ready.
*knocking at door* Caroline goes to door sw hissing and clawing at caroline
C:bad kitty
Caroline opens door, kim is standing there.
Kim: Hi, boyce sent me, he heard sue white was on her way to help you.
C:the cat has arrived.
kim(confused):what?
C: Sue has decided she is a cat.
Sue pounces on kim.
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outside the castle

caroline is flanked up the aisle by little bridesmaid and SW(wearing a lilacy(sp) bridesmaid kinda outfit) caroline is in wedding dress minus purple bits and bobbles.

(wedding scene is repeated but in different dress.)

(if people like it wen my frend returns my special DVD will fill this scene in more its difficult to remeber the order of things wit out watching it in 10 days)
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(just before caroline takes of wit da ballons)
Caroline is standing on balcony, Mac reappears wit the cake.
C:I had a really strange dream last night
MacRed Faceohh did I feature in it
C:Yeah it was my wedding day but i floated away when i was holding onto the ballons and Guy saw my 'growler' and you had sumthing to tell me.


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excuse faces not sure how they got; there blame naughty kittens on key board.

it goes on but am v tired now, so it will soon be even worse incohherant(sp) drivel


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hey, i like it! im an english student, and i love writing! we shudder get ideaes tomorrow, i gladly write it up for you!
 
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hey, i like it! im an english student, and i love writing! we shudder get ideaes tomorrow, i gladly write it up for you!


Thanks terry, it needs more adding to it, can post more 2 mo?
have to get your third cliff event in tho its billiant especially wit SW


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the next bit if u wanna write it terry? sees Mac carrying caro into the wedding suite but mac trips up and caroline lands on bed.

cuts to Sue wit simba, sue is telling simba that he has a nasty step mum now, Sue "she once broke ur daddys nose."

mac and caroline are in bed a phone rings
Caroline: shuutt up, will u
Mac:ignore it it will soon stop rining, now come here mrs macartney. Mac learns over and kisses her (another phone rings)
caroline: agghhh
mac (ansewrs phone):Hello, yes, what today, im on my honeymoon, ok, thank you.
Mac: Ive got 2 go 2 the hospital today
caroline; ohh(looks very worried)what is it?, did the say?, why today?, is it urgernt?, its are honeymoon, is it bad?.
Mac: Calm down, breath, look it is better to get it over and done with.

Cuts to the hospital.
Guy is in Sue office
Sue is dancing round singing and guy looks bemused
Martin runs in
M: Is it try what they are saying about dr.statham, so if it is it means that...
Sue: whoahh hold the horse( stamps her feet and whinnies)

Caroline is putting her shoes on
Mac: is that a new fashion statement?
C:i'm confused?
Mac: the odd shoes
C: ohh sh**ite
They walk out of the room holding hands and get on the ducati which has got streamers etc. and just married on it.


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thought id bump this up so u can have a look, and make some of your own!
 
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i just copied mine to the safe haven


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u moving urs terry?


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