my first one didnt go so well so im going to give it one last go
please give me your opinions poitive or negative



It was the first night of my arrival in the village, i woke up in the middle of the night able to hear the rain pounding on the window the sound of the wind gusting through the village.
Now that I am here what am I suppose to do. I thought to myself
As I had made a promise I knew that I couldn’t break it as I didn’t want to go through the same. Knowing that everyone is out to get you, know one wants to know who you are and also believe you’re the same as the rest of your family that was something I didn’t want.
i turend around in my bed and reached out fro my clock by now it was 7 am i decided to get up and see what the village was like before it got too busy. after a tour of the village i thought to my self this is a plac ei could see myself living but would i be able to stay?
later that day I left my flat and headed off to drive and buy wondering what I was going to say, do we look alike would they recognise me all different thought wer rushing through my head i was starting to feel physically sick.
I was so scared not knowing what to say to anybody. As I could see the shop clearer the closer I was my knees wer shaking with fear, was he going to be in there, would he know who I am, the same person who made sure I would never see him again. I walked in holding my hand bag as tightly as possible I raised my head up from the floor and there he was stood in front of me looking me up and down what was I suppose to do next?

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Good... Who is it about?

likin it whos it about?????????

this is really gr8. who is it about??????

glad your liking it so far hopefully it will improve more as i go along
its about sean's sister who has come back to claim what is rightfully heres but is scared of warren and just

i pretended i didn’t notice him and walk past him so that i could get the milk, as i closed the door and turned around both of them where now standing right in my face
I’m Justin Burton and I’m warren fox they said.
i ignored their comments and headed off to the till, i could hear their footsteps following my every move.
warren came closer to me so close i could feel his breath against my skin.
slowly he said i know your new here but if you want to stay i suggest you start being polite to your neighbours.
i ran out of the shop and on my way i dropped the pint of milk on the floor, as i was rushing through the door i could hear a guy behind the till shouting i need 2 pay for that.
i ran as fast as i could taking off my red peep toes so i was able to run faster turning around every other second scared warren or Justin was behind me. i didn't know if they recognised me yet but by staying and talking to the man who killed my brother it was too much of a risk.
i reached for my flat door searching through my hand bag for my keys its moments like this i wonder why do i carry a hand bag that’s nearly as big as a suitcase and how would Victoria Beckham react if it was here in this situation would she still carry a huge hand bag.
i still couldn’t find my keys, my heart was beating so fast by now i thought it was going to cause me a heart attack, the sound of the foot steps where coming closer and closer by now i was hot and flustered shaking with fear i could feel my face going pale the hallway was spinning i decided to empty my whole bag out to see if i could find my keys by now i knew that the footsteps where nearly behind me i got up and searched my pockets when suddenly

I felt a cold hand touch up on my face.
My body froze i didnt know what to do i had heard people say they freeze but i didnt know they meant literally.

He started speaking i a deep voice.
" You didn't introduce yourself properly back at Drive and Buy"
What was i ment to say I'm Sophie Kenedy you killed my brother.

i tryed to reply naturally but i think it came across as i had a stammer.
'oh oh sorry i was in a bit of a hurry i have family coming over'

wel i dont think they would have been able to get in see, the milk wasnt all you dropped, you also dropped your keys. Having your adress put on them isnt the smartest move is it.

Is my name on there? i don't remember, what am i going to do once he sees the surname he will know, he will know what if he does the same to ,me what if

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This is really good!

Sorry I didn't catch your name

You didn't catch it as i never mentioned it

oh no was that being rude should i have said that?

Every word i say re runs in my head and i am always in fear, fear of what he is going to do or say who he may call if he does, knowing he knows where i live i will have the fear of answering the door.
I can see you’re quite rude, fast to jump the gun.

You would know all about guns wouldn't you.

now i really was in trouble

Sorry am i missing something here, do you know me or something?

No no i don't know you listen i have to go i have family coming over

See I’m not done it, family did you say?

By now he was studding my face it was like my face was a map and he was lost looking fo directions his eyes moving from left to right up and down.

Yes family yano my mother she’s coming over and i want the place to be spotless for her so she can be proud of me.

You look familiar to me you have either lived here before or had a brother or sister who has lived here, don't start making up names as i have contacts.
As he was talking his eyes where going bigger i thought they where going to burst.

What was i suppose to say now?

should i write more? i'm not to sure myself

let me no

write more plz its really good

No no i haven't lived here before or had family who have lived here?

Are you sure, see i can tell when people are lying to me and belive me i am not a person to be messed around.

As he was talking he pushed me against the door. It was a small but hard shove, my head banged against the key whole and i was in pain and in fear.

il ask you again are you sure

his oice was getting louder and his face was starting to go red, it looked like all of the blood in his body was suddenly rushing to his face.

Yes im sean

no i slipped up, i closed my eyes hoping he wouldn't have heard me, no matter what i said next i knew i couldn't dig myself out of this 6 foot whole that i had just dug myself into, there is a saying once youve dug a whole stop diggin but im awful i never know exactly when to stop.

sean, hes your brother isn't he.

Sean whos sean oh are you on about eastenders yes thats a rubbish soap and he is a villan.

Eastenders no im on about sean kenndedy
Don't play dumb with me i know for a fact you know him, and also i know youre related to him some way or another, See your family all look the same easy to spot from a mile, and you all stink.

you stink of the smell of fear, your all mouth and no action which is a shame really and theres me thinking you were going to be around for a while.

Slowly he went into his inside pocket of his coat and pulled it out.

Waht was i going to do i was trapped, i had no where to run

update soon please

i think its only you that is still reading it lillmiszsunshine i will do more soon though i think.