this is my first hollyfic so i'm open to constructive criticism

A car pulled up outside of Drive ‘N’ Buy, out got a young girl. She had brown hair and was curvaceous, she went round to the boot of the car and got out a pushchair as she did this John-Paul stepped out of Drive ‘N’ Buy. He walked towards her “would you like some help?” he asked her.
“Just hold on” she said “I’m almost done” she lent into the back of the car to get out a young child she placed the child in the pushchair before looking at John-Paul again. “Do you know where I can find Kieron Hobbs?” she asked.
“He’ll be at church at the moment”
“Can you take me there?”
“Sure but I think I should introduce myself I’m John-Paul”
“Oh, sorry I’m Arielle and this is Rupert” she said indicating her self and the young child. ”Hi” John-Paul said.
“Is the church far to walk too? Only I’ve not got much fuel”
“It’s about a 5 minute walk” he replied. They set off through the village in silence. John-Paul couldn’t help but think about the night before he’d made one hell of a fool of himself. Arielle broke the silence “is there a service on at the church?”
“No it was, must have been something else”
“We won’t be interrupting will we?”
“I wouldn’t think so, it’s just round this corner do you want me to go?”
“Please don’t” They walked into the church. Kieron looked up from the font where he had been clearing up and saw John-Paul his heart started pounding he stopped what he was doing and moved away from the font. He looked again and saw there was someone else with John-Paul. He recognized this woman but couldn’t place her within hollyoaks.

hope you like it let me know if you want more!!

Hey my names Nikki!

I am obbssesed with Kieron along side 1 of my forum buddies! (u know who u are )

i read everi Kieron fic!

and even though this is just the start i think it is really good!

more soon!
xx

forgot to ask anymore cumin up today ?

i'm glad you like it i'm a huge kieron fan as well i just think the whole kieron and john-paul thing is so cute

sure i'll put some up in a while just need to finish typing some up.

Cool! i can't wait!


i will b reading ur fic so just call me Nikki!

Its great that there is a another huge Kieron fan out there!!

I luv Jp and Kieron together aswell! they are so dam cute!

i think Jake Hendriks is so fit!!!!!!!!!
i luv his backstage vid!
xxx

here is the next lot

It then dawned on him “Arielle “he said before heading up the aisle towards her and John-Paul. He embraced Arielle and reach down to let Rupert out of his pushchair and held him “Hello, little man” he said Kieron turned to face Arielle “what are you doing here?” he asked.
“Where do I start Mum and Dad, the other people in the village” she sighed
“Hold on” interrupted John-Paul “How do you two know each other?”
“Arielle is my sister, anyway what have Mum and Dad done?”
“ Well I broke up with Matt because he was cheating on me with Martha, so Mum and Dad think I’ve brought disgrace upon the family as well as shame!”
“You poor thing let me close up here and I’ll take you for a coffee”
“Ta Kie, I’ll take Roo outside” she took Rupert off Kieron and went outside pushing the pushchair with one hand. John-Paul turned to follow her out “look thanks for bringing her here, can we meet up later?” Kieron asked John-Paul
“That would be great but what about your sister?”
“She’ll be fine, she’ll probably need time to think” They headed towards the exit, John-Paul glanced at Kieron and saw that he had ‘that’ silly grin on his face. Kieron locked the door and took Rupert off Arielle again and they headed towards the village.

At Il Nosh Arielle settled Rupert into back into his pushchair while Kieron got the coffees. He came back out and joined them at the table but he couldn’t help himself from looking in the direction of the McQueen house. “What’s going on between you two?” Arielle asked “and don’t say nothing ‘cause I know there is you’ve not taken that grin off your face since you came out of church”
“How do you know it’s not ‘cause I’m glad to see you both again”
“if it was because of seeing us that grin would have appeared earlier and you know it”
“Okay, okay but not know tell me about you”
“Mum won’t talk to me because I’m now a single mum and everyone else avoids me like the plague and looks at me down their noses”
“Where are your friends?”
“Everyone’s met new friends at college and aren’t bothered about hanging out with me, but what can I do and Leo is off in the marines”
“No wonder you came for a visit”
“Visit, I think you’ve got the wrong idea I’m moving to Hollyoaks”
“You need to think about what is best for Roo”
“This is the best, he won’t have to grow up in a place where he and his mum are not accepted”
“if your sure this is the right thing to do then I’ll do my best to help you”
“Thank you” Arielle gasped she jumped up and gave Kieron a big hug.
“I can’t let you stay with me, I don’t think Niall will appreciate Roo running around the place, but I will see if Myra will allow you to stay at the McQueens” Kieron said while thinking it gave him more chance to see John-Paul. Kieron headed off to see Myra while Arielle picked up a few bits from Drive ‘N’ Buy.

It's good so far
Is your name Beth by, any chance?

yep!! i don't know how you could have guessed.

lol!!!!!

lol
I'm called Beth too!
how ironic

More soon!

xxx


Hey if u want later cum on the a "questin for u all" thread! me and my forum buddies talk there!
u seem cool so cum over if u want!

BETH!!!!!!!!!!!!!
*HUGS*
HOW ARE U ?

which one?
I take it as mwahhsss!
Im on the thread!
gurd tar *hugs*
Nikki im sooo crazy today!

2 beths!

i might get confused!

hey Beth and Beth
cum over to the "Question for you thread"
that means we can all talk!

I'm on the thread you goofball!
I might change my name to Tori

quote:

which one?
I take it as mwahhsss!
Im on the thread!
gurd tar *hugs*
Nikki im sooo crazy today!

u!
thanks for the hug!
i Hyper but is that ever a suprise!
lol!

quote:

I'm on the thread you goofball!
I might change my name to Tori

Me
GOOFBALL!?

U made Nikki sad now!

nope
welcome babes
Love youuuuuu (non gayish)

awwwww poor Niksi!

Hey the other Beth
r u cumin ?

oh i luv ya to Tori or beth!
what are u changing it to! u r makin Nikki veri confused!


and yespoor Nikki! u called her a name!!!

right lets not ruin this thread!!!!!!!

anyone fancy any more?? i've just finshed typing up some more but then you'll have to wait a while.

hi to all of you reading this

Huggles to Nikki and Beth!!!

yep please!
More on my fic soon (Nikki it's the McPriesty bit LMAO)

ok! i u want!

Awwww thanks Beth!

here is more

She strolled towards Drive ‘N’ Buy while day dreaming of her new life if in Hollyoaks when she was jolted to a stop. She snapped out of her day dream and saw that she’d run the pushchair into someone. “ can’t you just look where you’re going” the man exclaimed, Arielle looked up and saw that he was dressed in womens clothing. “I’m so sorry, can I buy you a drink later as part of my apology”
“I suppose so”
“I’m Arielle by the way and can you recommend somewhere only I’m new here” she explained.
“Kris Fisher, I’ll meet you in the SU bar at 8”
“See you later”
“Bye”
Arielle struggled to get the pushchair through the door of Drive ‘N’ Buy. When inside she wandered round looking for nappies, she knew she should start potty training Rupert but she didn’t have the help she’d need. She found the nappies they were hidden near the washing detergents, Arielle headed towards the counter and grabbed some chocolate on the way. At the till was a young blonde girl Arielle guessed they were of a similar age.
“Would you like anything else?” The girl asked.
“No thanks”
“Okay that will be £10.40” Arielle handed over £10.50 and went outside, she saw there was a fountain opposite Il Nosh, she went and sat on the bench she handed Rupert a milkybar.

Kieron saw Arielle sat by the fountain he went over to tell her the good news.
“Boo” he said while hiding behind her
“Arrgh” she screamed as Kieron leapt over the bench and sat beside her.
“Don’t ever do that again!!” she said
“Don’t be such a spoil sport, anyway I’ve got some good news you can stay with the McQueen’s, I’ll take you over in a mo”

gurd!

luv it still!
can't wait for more!