okay,so i dont know if this is good,so any comments would be a help.obviously melissa couldnt have died for this to work though!i decided to make the girls older,and at secondary school,as everyone else whos written one,all the kids are little.

Meet twin girls hayden louise ashworth-mcqueen and riley anna ashworth-mcqueen.the girls have a mum called Hannah,a dad called john-paul.and john pauls partner (dad) matt,and hannahs partner (dad) mark.and then theirs hannahs best friend auntie Melissa,and her partner uncle liam.life is complicated to say the least.they may be identical,but they couldn’t be more different.hayden is outgoing,popular,career driven,part – time model,head girl,head of school council,daddys girl.where-as riley is a shy,also career drivin,but more of a mummys girl.and with Hannah pregnant again,and melissas girl ella being haydens rival for all her headships and modelling jobs,lifes a tough ride for “the girls with 3 daddys”

should i write more,or just leave it there and forget about it?

please write more

Write more of this. I like the idea of rivalry between Hayden (I love that name) and Ella.

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Originally posted by Tamz:
Write more of this. I like the idea of rivalry between Hayden (I love that name) and Ella.

i love that name too.my mate hayden wouldnt be impressed if he thought i loved his name...for a girl!

“are you serious?……oh my god!….you bet ill be there!…….uh-huh…..yeah…..of course…..thanks!bye!oh my god,youll never guess which job ive just landed!”a very exited hayden turned around to her sister,who was lying on her bed with a magazine.
“the magazine fashion one?”riley asked,not even looking up.
“no.even better!the cleansing ad.you know,the one ella was after?”
“I thought you didn’t want that one?”she answered,looking at her sister
“i…didn’t”hayden replied,turning towards her mirror. “but itll be on telly and magazines here and in Ireland,that’s loads of publicity-“
“and its one over ella?”
“yeeaah,theres that too”hayden answered,fiddling with her straight brown hair.
“do you I should wear my hair up or down?”
“down and curly”riley answered
“curly?I bought my straightners for a reason!”hayden laughed
“but the idea is for you to look natural right?you look really over processed with straight hair”riley said before looking back at her magazine.
Hayden looked in the mirror for a moment,and clipped it up.
“maybe….your right”hayden said slowly.“how about curly and up…like this?”she said,turning around to face her sister.
“you look lovely”riley said,not even looking up.
“you know,I don’t know why you don’t go into modelling.twins is hot stuff at the mo.and look at me.i have money and im annoying ella and-“
“degrading yourself in the public eye”riley finished,before putting hert hand over her mouth. “hayden.i-”
“degrading?thanks.so me,auntie Melissa,auntie sarah,mum,uncle liam and ella-well,ella is with her slutty stuff,but your saying were degrading ourselves?”hayden asked,looking hurt
“n…I don’t mean it like that.listen,I-”
“I degrade you when I work,cuz people think your me with a blonde wig on.im sorry I disappoint and degrade you”hayden said,slightly upset,and walking out of the room.
“hayden”riley called. “hayden!”riley sighed

the next day the girls are getting ready for school

“morning girls”john paul said as the 2 sleepy looking girls walked into the kitchen.
“morning dad.what are you doing here?”a puzzled riley asked,her blonde curley hair sticking up on the left side
“charming!I come round here,7 in the morning,and I get asked why im here!”john paul joked
hayden shrugged. “well?why are you here?”her brown hair gone slighty wavy where she slept on it
“your mum and mark had an early scan,so ive come to take you to school,and make sure you get ready!”john paul joked,ruffling haydens hair as he walked past her with his coffee,and settled down at the table.
“nice to see you dad” riley said giving him a kiss on the cheek,and walking out of the room with a glass of milk
“you too kiddo.and you hay”
hayden forced a smile. “yeah” she said walking towards the kettle,and getting a mug down from the cupboard
“whats wrong sweetheart?”john paul asked,making his way over to his slightly eldest daughter,and put his arm around her shoulders
“do you think my modellings degrading?”she asked,looking into her dads eyes.
“what?of course not!im very proud of you and what you’ve made of yourself!what would make you think that?”
“riley said I was degrading myself in the public eye”
“ignore her” he said,giving her a kiss in her hair. “shes just jealous” he said,giving her a wink,and making his way back to the table
“thanks dad”she said quietly
“but I think you should dye you hair back blonde.make you look more like your very good looking dad”he said posing,making hayden laugh
“well make a model out of you yet!”riley said bouncing into the room and grabbing an apple before leaving the room again.
“it is something ive been thinking about”she answered,pouring the water from the kettle into the cup
“whys that?”
“make me look more like you and mum and riley,rather then ella and Melissa.whenever me and ella and Melissa are out,they always say “what lovely daughters you have” and it doesn’t seem right you know?”
“yeah..and the real reason?”
“what?”she asked?
“the real reason.you love your brown hair”
hayden took the teabag out of her mug
“I want riley to be proud of me”she whispered
“what?she is!”
“but she thinks im degrading and over processed.i want to change that”she said,leaving the room with her tea
“hayden….HAYDEN?!”john paul called after her,before sighing
“RILEY?YOU BETTER NOT BE IN THE BATHROOM!”hayden called,walking up the stairs.

RING!RING!

Hayden looked at her phone

“ella calling”

she flipped it up

“good morning ella,what do I own this fine displeasure?…..yeah….yeah…..i got it…..sorry didn’t know you were after it….uh-huh,well I would offer it to my favourite cousin,but unfortunately,sophie isn’t into modelling….hello?…..hello?”she flipped her phone down. “someones not a happy bunny!riley,are you in the bedroom or bathroom?”hayden called out
“bedroom!”she called back. “im really sorry about yesterday..”she said coming out of the room,for the bathroom door to shut.
“girls?its 7.30,we need to leave in 15 minutes!”john paul called up the stairs
hayden opened the door
“teeth are clean.face is clean.clothes and make to go on!”hayden piped up,and skipped into the bedroom,leaving riley standing in the corridor,outside the bathroom door,alone,looking down at the disapproving look her father was giving her.
“she just wants you to be proud of her”he said,before walking away.

next time im going to go into ella/hayden a bit i think....dont know yet!

Hayden seems a bit bitchy - I like it Looking forward to the whole ella vs. hayen thing

thanks tamz!next bit should be up soon if my laptop doesnt crash again!

i dont think this bits right,but i needed to put something up!next bit up later (hopefully) xxx

“ill be in the car girls!”john paul called up the stairs,and left the house,and got into his car,putting the radio on.a few minutes later his phone rang.

“Hannah calling”

“hello?”he answered
“hi john paul!its Hannah”said a chirpy voice
“I guessed that when my phone said “Hannah calling””he laughed. “so?how did everything go?”he asked as his 2 daughters got into the back of the car.
“everythings fine.healthy,happy,the works”she answered happily.
“good,im glad.ive got the girls in the car”he answered
“how did you do that?I cant get them in the car until atleast 8?”
“its my amazing charm”he answered. “so do you know if it’s a girl or a boy?”
“well,I don’t want to know,but mark did,so he knows,and from his body language when we talk about it,I think it could be a girl!”
“well as long as you don’t give her a boys name again,im happy!”
his daughters look at each other
“haven’t you ever heard of hayden panettiere?”Hannah asked
“you have reminded me countless times of who she is!”john paul answered
“which proves that-”
“her family are itallian. And that its probably a commen girls name over their?”
“their talking about you”riley whispered to her sister.
“no,their talking about hayden panettiere!”hayden laughed back
“look,im not getting into this now!the girls names suit them,girls names or not!”he laughed
“goodbye john paul!”
“bye han” he said,hanging up the phone.he turned to his girls. “everythings fine with the baby.”he told them
“what did you want to call us?”riley quizzed her father
“well,hayden would have been called chloe-with a k.and riley,you would have been called keira,but spelt ciara-the irish way.”
“and you didn’t even get them as middle names?”hayden asked
“your mother didn’t think they sounded right,and after all I did to her,I only thought it was right to let her call you what she wanted to”
memorys of what hed done to Hannah,and how he didn’t even know he was going to be a dad until the day his girls were born went straight through his head.
“dad?the car?you need to turn the key for it to start”hayden stated
“oh,uh,yeah,sorry girls”he said,starting the car.
“I told your auntie melissa that id take ella today,save her the trouble seeing as were going past them”john paul told them
“oh whoop-de-doo”hayden muttered
“but ella lives over the other side of town.how are we going past them?”riley queried.
“I need fuel,and plus,your mum expected me to make you lunch!ill buy you something from subway,saves me doing it.that’s why were passing ellas”john paul answered,turning left
“guess what dad.you that job that job she get going on about,sure she was going to get it?guess who got it?!”hayden said leaning forwards
“that’s my girl!that girl needs bringing down a peg or two!”he said,ruffling haydens hair with one hand,not looking at her.
“dad!”hayden shouted,grooming her hair
“sorry!”he said,holding his hands up,while waiting for the lights to change
“s’ok”she muttered,brushing it
“right,fuel,lunch,ella.sound like a plan?”john paul asked his girls

20 mins later,they pull up outside Melissa,liam and ellas house.

BEEP BEEP!

A few minutes later,ella comes out the house.shes the spit of Melissa.exept she doesn’t have her mothers brown eyes,but emerald green ones,which she must have got from her father,evan (the other model)

“hi uncle john paul,hey riles”she said,getting into the car. “hayden” she said bluntly
“ella”she replied in a similar tone
“morning ella,how are you?”john paul asked his niece before she could say anything back
“okay I suppose.how about you?”
“cant complain”
“dad?its almost 8.30,and I have a council meeting to go to.”hayden interrupted
“okay!well be there,don’t worry!”he sighed,pulling out of the driveway

10 mintues later,they arrive at school

“thanks dad”riley said getting out of the car
“yeah,thanks daddy”hayden said,kissing her dads cheek and follwing her sister
“that’s allright.now hurry up and get to your meeting!”
“I will”hayden smiled
“thanks uncle john paul”ella said,quickly getting out of the car. “hayden!”she called after her cousin
“hayden!”she repeated,running after her.
“what?”hayden asked,turning to face her cousin
“about that job.please cant you just say you cant make it?you know what my mums like.i haven’t had a job in ages”ella pleaded
“grovelling?nice.didn’t think that was your style el”she answered,before turning around towards the building again
“hayden wait”she said,grabbing her arm. “please.you know what my mum is like. “why are you always losing out to the pretty girls ella?there shouldn’t be “pretty” girls,you should be THE pretty girl.why cant you be like hayden ella?” its like I disappoint her”ella told her cousin
“well at least you always have acting to fall back on”hayden replied,taking ellas arm off her,and walking away.
Anger built up inside of ella.
“this isn’t over hayden!ill get that job!ill get more jobs then you!ill be bigger,and better,and more internationally known then you!you just wait and see!”she screamed,before storming of in the other direction towards her tutor room

omg,i havent written a part of this for almost 7 mnths!!!!!
ive had the next part written and everything!!!!!
lol

love it!

please update soon

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okay,heres the first of 3 bits ive had written for ages.might not make sense as ive had to change bits as hollyoaks and made them not make sense!!hehe

“what?name one thing she has that I don’t?”ella screamed at her boyfriend
“modelling contracts.nice personality.nice body.doesn’t snap for no reason.hot twin.pick your one from that”he answered, before turning to walk away
“you cant break up with me!I do the breaking up!”she stamped her feet
“well your to late this time” he shrugged, before getting lost in the crowd
ella stood their,stunned.she couldn’t believe the day she was having.hayden was getting everything
“youll be back!just wait!she wont be good to you!”

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hayden got up out of her seat to leave the meeting, and waited outside the door for her friend Amanda kennedy to finish her argument with the teacher about a detention.
“hey”
“oh,hi Kieran”
*awkward silence*
“so….you okay?”hayden asked
“me?yeah,fine,you?”
“im good”she said nodding
“good”
*awkward silence.haydens phone went off*
(“matts picking u up.luv u.dad x”)
“so…..i hear you got the modelling contact ella was after.the face ad or something”
“yeah,I did”she answered,flipping her phone down
“so that should be good”
“yeah.loads of publicity, but I dont know if ill take it”
“why not?”
“ella hasn’t had a lot of things recently,so I think I might turn it down and see if they give it to her”hayden nodded,looking a bit like a nodding dog
“why?the things she says about you?she doesn’t deserve it!”
“you shouldn’t say such stuff about your girlfriend like that!”hayden smiled, “what kinda stuff?”she joked
“shes not my girlfriend”keiran answered, slightly awkward
“oh no!how come?”hayden asked sympathetically
“I broke up with her”Kieran nodded in the same way hayden had. Hayden went to open her mouth to say something back, when the door opened, and a girl came flying out.
“stupid miss stenson with her, ‘I wont have you nenenenenne’” impersonating miss stenson. “YOU ARE SUCH A STUPID BI-”
“we better go” said hayden, grabbing her friends hand, and putting her hand over her mouth. “bye Kieran”
“see ya” he called to haydens back

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LUNCHTIME

“well well well!if it isn’t the thief!”ella said, walking up to her cousin
“hi ella”hayden replied,continuing walking
“how dare you steal from me?hmm?”
“excuse me?”hayden asked,stopping,slightly taken aback
“well,first you steal my ad-”
“not my fault they didn’t want you-“
“save it!”ella answered,holding up a hand.hayden smiled
“and then you thieve my boyfriend!”
“okay,you been on the happy pills again,cuz im really lost now!”hayden answered, starting to walk past her cousin,but ella grabbed her hair
“ow!”
“Kieran broke up with me, to be with you.what did you do to him?drug him?bribe him?sleep with him?”ella whispered violently in haydens ear
“I have no idea what your talking about.so you better let go of me,take more happy pills,and sort out your issues.got it?”hayden said back through gritted teeth
ella pushed hair cousin, while letting go of her hair, so that she fell on the floor.students walking past stopped, and some started laughing.riley was walking past,put her stuff down, and helped her twin up.
“you are so pathetic ella!I don’t want your stupid boyfriend,or your modelling jobs!I cant believe I was actually going to give you my job!I am so naïve!” hayden laughed
“you are so self absorbed!”ella shouted. “you sooo want Kieran, and you love the fact you get offered the jobs I want!your just trying to make yourself look better!make yourself seem normal infront of everyone, so they forget you have 3 dads!”ella started screaming with laughter
“well at least our dad stuck around!”riley screamed back.everyone looked at her.was riley ashworth-mcqueen really shouting?sticking up for herself even?
“excuse me?”ella looked stunned
“you heard me!” riley answered,walking towards her in a kind of intimidating way “acting like your so perfect.like your so normal.like everyone wants to be you.and you don’t care who you trample over to get there!” she was now nose-to-nose with ella. “you make me sick” she whispered
“shouldn’t be too hard.i hear it runs in the family?!”ella said smugly
“you bitch!”hayden screamed,launching herself at ella,pulling her hair, and hitting her anywhere,and anyhow.just to cause her anysort of pain. Riley stood there,motionless.the fact shed confronted someone, the fact everyone had seen.that shes started this was a terrifying thought to her.everyone was staring.some egging on hayden.some ella.and the rest for riley to join in.but instead, she started running in the opposite direction, and around the corner till out of sight. The other two continued fighting.screaming while other students encouraged them to carry on,until-
“stop it!stop this right now!you two!”the teacher pointed to two students. “split them up!”
the two guys walked over,one pulling a kicking ella away, the other, a fidgeting hayden, neither letting go.
“now I don’t know whats going on here,but it stops.now!both of you,my office,immediately!the rest of you,clear off!”she shouted, escorting the girls back to her office.when they got their,she got straight down to business
“I don’t know what was wrong,nor do I care,but their will not be fighting in school!understand?”
“yes miss”both the girls answered
“so what happened?you (pointing to ella) wait outside,then ill ask you”she pointed to the door.ella got up and left the room.hayden looked around the office.it was pretty small,with a dark oak,old fashioned desk in the middle, with a picture of 2 little girls,and a teenage boy, and 5 teenage girls. There was another face,that had been covered up, and then someone had tried to uncover it, but ruining it more. The room was full of books.she was having a look,trying to figure out as much about the new teacher as she could
“I like your desk”
“thanks.whats your name?”
“hayden”
“ahh,the famous hayden!what happened between you and…..-”
“ella.she laughed at the fact my mum was bulimic and anorexic.and she said I was pretty much stealing her life”hayden answered
“and so you started the fight?” mrs dean asked,staring at hayden,but in a sort of confused/wondering way,not scary
“well,yeah,but we were only arguing at first,which she started, and then-”
“but you started the fight.im going to have to suspened you”
“what?but miss,please?she….you cant tell me you wouldn’t have done the same?”
“that’s not the point hayden.but don’t worry.ella will be suspended too.now,your suspension will start as soon as your parents get here,understood?now ill need their names and contact details please”she said,grabbing a pen and paper.
“fine-”
“and a 2000 word assignment on why art and textiles are such big factors in the developing world, and why a model makes all the diference to an item of clothing designed purely for its art” she looked up, and saw haydens confused expression
“its my first day,im going to give you something you can handle,and something easy for me to mark!”she smiled
“now,hayden. I hear you are both models?”
“yep”
“enjoy it!doesn’t last long for many people!not many of us can get to my age and look like kate moss did!”
hayden stared at her blankly.
“kate moss was-”
“a model.yeah,I know.but couldn’t you have thought of anyone now-ish?”
“showing my age,eh?”mrs dean joked
“no,I….your not-”
“its fine.really.”
“and your last name, and their names please”
“hayden ashworth-mcqueen.my mums Hannah ashworth,and my dads-”
“john paul mcqueen”

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Is it Nancy? Well no, it has to be... ignore me. Lol.
I like it.
More please!