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Heh. Thanks, LJ. All of which was unintentional, but never mind. Still not happy with that last line! Roll Eyes


"One day my logic was proven wrong because the tide came in and gave me a sail"
 
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Ok last part. Some of it is rather tedious, i.e the dialogue. But that was how i wrote it way back when!

I wasn't sure what to do with the eding either. But give it a go....Wink

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Secrets & Lies

The night was soon over and it was morning again, this time Liz was up before me. I went downstairs and saw everyone crowded round a table.
“Hey sweetie, we’ve got something to tell you,” Mum said, meaning my Aunt. I looked at Liz, had she told them already? She shook her head, knowing what I was thinking. I sat down with them and got myself a piece of toast.
“What?” I said, whilst buttering my toast.
“We’re leaving today, tonight rather, see your dad doesn’t like the job over here, he prefers his one back home, so we won’t be moving out here anymore,” I dropped my toast halfway to my mouth and looked up.
“What??” I said a little amazed.
“I’m afraid we’re going back home, you’re due to start back at school next week,”
“What???” I was getting a little panicky, “I don’t think that’d be possible,” I said in unison with Liz. I could see everyone look from me to Liz.
“I’m NOT going back to that place mother, EVER,”
“What? Sweetheart what are you talking about?”
“I’m talking about the fact that you aren’t my real mother, and so you can’t make me go back there,” I said, somewhat rather cooly.
“What?” She looked horrified “where have you gotten that idea?” I could Liz’s mum and dad watching with a look of awe on their faces.
“I know, mum, and I want to stay here,”
“Know what?”
“For god sake do I have to spell it out to you? I know you aren’t me real mother and father, and that they are,” I replied pointing at what I used to think were my Aunt and Uncle. She gasped.
“But How?”
“I found the papers,” I said “And now I know, I have the right to decide who I want to stay with, and I’ve made my choice it’s here, with my sister,”
“But, you can’t you have a home with us,”
“No, that isn’t true Chloe,” My real mother said, “If she had a real home with you, you wouldn’t have sent her packing to that god forsaken boarding school, and she wouldn’t have run away, she’s right it’s her decision who she wants to stay with and she’s made it,”
“No, this is what you’ve always wanted isn’t it? For you precious little daughter to find out the truth and come running back to you,”
“Yes actually, it is, but I never made her find out did I? She found out herself,” I raised my eyebrows at my real aunt giving her a ‘ha you’ve lost’ kind of look.
She breathed in deeply, “Well actually, Jes, you’re wrong, because when you signed those adoption papers Amber was officially ours, and she still is, so if you don’t mind she will be leaving with us, and she will go back to that school, it’s the best thing that’s happened to her,” I couldn’t believe what I was hearing, ‘the best thing that ever happened to me?’
“WHAT??” I screamed, and took everyone by surprise, “that place the ‘best thing that ever happened to me’? Yeah right, if that place was the best thing that ever happened to me then why did I run away huh? And tell me, if that place was the best thing that ever happened to me then why did I get these?”
I got up and turned around and lifted up the back of my top showing my scar ridden back. I heard them all gasp in horror, I turned around to face them all.
“Oh my god, Amber how the hell did you get those?” My real mum asked close to tears.
“I was bullied, for being new, and that’s why I ran away, but when I got back they all called me a traitor and so decided to torture me in anyway possible,”
“What?” My real dad whispered, he turned on my fake mum, “You let my daughter go to that place and get those??!!” he shouted, “How could you EVER let her go there? You should have known about this!”
“I never knew a thing I swear, why didn’t you ever tell us any of this?” Chloe asked me,
“I tried to, hundreds of times, when you came up to school in the office, I tried to tell you then, but all you said was that you didn’t want to hear any excuses, as I was to stay there until I had finished,”
“WHAT???” He bellowed, “You let her go to that place and get tortured, and when she tried to tell you, you said you didn’t want to hear excuses?? What kind of parents are you?”
“Obviously not good enough ones,” Jes my mum said calmly, “ She’ll be staying with us, we’ll talk to our lawyer tomorrow, goodbye, and have a good flight,”
And with that she left, Liz looked exhausted even though she’d just woken up, Mum turned to look at me, “You don’t know how many times I’ve tried to get you back, honestly, I’m just so thankful that you found out yourself and decided to stay with us,” I smiled at her and threw myself into a hug.
“I wish I’d’ve found out ages ago, you don’t know what it was like at that place,” We pulled out and she said “Well it’s no more secrets and lies from now on Amber ok? You can tell us anything,” She said with a calm relief to her voice. I hugged her again, I saw Liz do something with her hand behind her back, she did it again, she widen her eyes and shook her head almost unnoticeably, and made a jerky movement with her hands, I knew what she meant, not to tell her about the powers. Well I suppose this time one little secret wouldn’t hurt would it?

That’s when everything seemed to be fine, seemed to sort things out. I’d told people, about what they were doing to me, and I’d made a decision about my life, not to live with the fake parents I’d been brought up with. Now maybe after all those months of pain, hurt and torture, the scars would finally be able to heal. Finally be able to disappear. But, no chance. That would never happen. A tear trickled down my face as the realization hit me; I’d be stuck in this place for what seemed like eternity. A place between reality and non-existence. I was soon brought out of this trance, of destinies and decisions.
All that admittance, between Max, Liz and me, would just, well, remain what they were, a ruse to break up the mundane life that I led in Alpine Forest Boarding School. My Mum was still my Mum, my Dad still my Dad. They weren’t the illegitimate Aunt and Uncle I wished them to be.
But maybe, just maybe, one day, those ruse would come true. I could make those things happen. Maybe. As for now, changing the molecular structure of things would suit me just fine. As for America? Spending a little more time there wouldn’t hurt, would it?


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Heh. Thanks, LJ. All of which was unintentional, but never mind. Still not happy with that last line! Roll Eyes

There's nothing wrong with the last line. It's a good line. Grammatically it holds up, at least to my eyes; and grammar isn't always the first concern of poetry anyway. My only argument is that it doesn't entirely fit with the rest of the poem. Other than that, it's fine.


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nice work ria!
scandal!

looking forwards to seeing what clare has for us...

mickey - care to accept a challenge?


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I liked that Becky. Smile And Ria, I am so so lazy, so I haven't read all of yours yet as it is long, but I am planning on doing so soon. Big Grin I liked the others.

Now for me, this doesn't meet the challenge at all... Roll Eyes, but this is just a little something until I can create some happy feeling. Just to warn ya - I don't do poetry all that well. Ninja

Watch your every move
frown scratching your face
I could turn that
to something else
I know

I'm not even here
Dark against the black wall
eyes diving over me
like dirty flies
Skimming the surface of my skin
Your eyes,
quick and light

Cloudy sky and strong
Your gaze stabs the room,
but never here
Empty land,
unexplored

Your hands for once
are still
Not scrambling for life
out of reach

She is already there
for you
Hands moving once more
to her

They smile together,
it warms up the room
But I am ice

As the lake now at my feet
Water licking the shore,
tendrils catching my toes

It's cold submerged
but safe
a few ripples
disturb the surface

but not for long


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"What could possibly make us even for the Tampa job...
"Why would you get a tattoo of a mop?"
 
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I liked that, Kaz. Smile I liked how you ended with just one line, making it all the more poignant. I also like how the lines don't finish per line; they're carried onto the next. For me, it creates a nice pace, a sort of prolongation of the feeling to it. Smile


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hey wow i really liked that kaz.

the whole atmosphere was really...it was sort of mysterious - like there is still a lot more in there that i didn't get the first time around.
i liked it.


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Grrr, the forum did that mandatory field thing and emptied my post. What the hell is that all about? Confused

Anyway, luckily it was short so I remember what I said: Thank you for the comments guys. Smile And now I will try to write something vaguely cheerful. Ninja


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or something about distance
either one


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Or both! Razz


"One day my logic was proven wrong because the tide came in and gave me a sail"
 
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hey nice work there clare - hurrah for challenge! it was really sweet and really sort of sad but not too, which was great. you somehow managed to have that hope and optimism in it without making it vomit-worthy cheesy. and that takes skill. nice one, really.

anyone else?
 
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Wow, so much to read since I last checked this thread. I will have to read it all tomorrow although I'm sure it's all fantastic. I really must get into writing mode again, I just have no inspiration though at the moment.


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Brilliant efforts from everyone, as usual...i have to write something soon


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To Milkshake:

My cupcake brings all the boys to the cafe
My brownies are better than yours
My scones are better then yours
My fudge cake is overcharged
My cupcake brings all the boys to the cafe
My brownies are better than yours
My scones are better then yours
My fudge cake is overcharged

(La-la-la-latte)
Serve it up
(La-la-la-latte)
I need my caffeine
(la-la-la-latte)
Warm it up
(La-la-la-latte)
I need my caffeine

My cupcake brings all the boys to the cafe
My brownies are better than yours
My scones are better then yours
My fudge cake is overcharged
My cupcake brings all the boys to the cafe
My brownies are better than yours
My scones are better then yours
My fudge cake is overcharged


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I'm not sure I fully understand that, GAD...Sorry. Frown

Susan_wannabe, I really liked it! You, I felt, got the balance right; it wasn't overly happy or overly tragic and it really worked well.
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Perhaps if you don’t let people too close, or if you prevent them from sitting high on the pedestal, it’s easier to lose them.

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GAD, wasn't that from the Lenny Henry show? Confused
 
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It was. Damn, you watch it!

Sorry, trying to sound funny there.


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And Loz- write us something happy...dare ya

I am actually working on it, Ive just been so busy Smile It'll be crap though....


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aha i wrote some Distance thing on the train this morning and i will post it up in a second - even if it's appalling. which i suspect it is, i havent looked at it since and i wrote it at 7.00, after not sleeping much (but one helluva gig from Rilo Kiley Big Grin)


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ouch
it really IS bad
and i'm not fishing for compliments here
i am being FEARLESS and POSTING
but i'm not liking this one bit:

The one mile perimeter
The eighty-four steps still to climb
The inch in which the bullet might've missed
The constant roll of days
Hours, minutes, distance, time.
When the sun leans to horizon and they kiss.
We found poetry on the rooftops
Found life upon the coast
Staring out across a stretch of far beyond
And we'll find each other where we;re waiting
Past the streets and sea and sky
And we've waited, we have waited for so long.
 
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I wrote something reflecting on yesterday's events. let me know what you think. Smile

"For London"

They said it was disturbing, they said that it was wrong,
But nothing can prepare you for the words that stab so strong,
Full of importance and full of information,
But what they don't say is just how rocked is this nation?
People will survive and people will fall,
The sorrow people feel is apparent in us all.

Nothing can prepare you for the events that may occur,
Sudden and unexpected it caught us quite off guard,
But we will not be beaten,
No, we are never going to fall,
For Bouncebackability is a word that describes us all,
We will come back and we will hold our heads up high,
For we are a Nation that can't crumble, that you can't deny.

Nothing can prepare us for a day like that day,
But what it will teach us is that the hope we share will never, ever fade.

Now all we can do, is pick ourselves up and soldier on,
For the enemy we loathe shall regret what they have done,
We did not deserve,
We did nothing wrong,
We celebrated and thanked only the day before.
And then were we targeted as we all knew would happen,
One day or another; we could not think we were immune.

But nothing, could prepare us for a day like that day,
The tragedy and devastation is apparent in us all,
But nothing can stop us,
From holding our heads up high,
For the spirit we feel as a Nation will never be forgotten.


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I wrote something, reflection on yesterday's events. let me know what you think. Smile

"For London"

They said it was disturbing, they said that it was wrong,
But nothing can prepare you for the words that stab so strong,
Full of importance and full of information,
But what they don't say is just how rocked is this nation?
People will survive and people will fall,
The sorrow people feel is apparent in us all.

Nothing can prepare you for the events that may occur,
Sudden and unexpected it caught us quite off guard,
But we will not be beaten,
No, we are never going to fall,
For Bouncebackability is a word that describes us all,
We will come back and we will hold our heads up high,
For we are a Nation that can't crumble, that you can't deny.

Nothing can prepare us for a day like that day,
But what it will teach us is that the hope we share will never, ever fade.

Now all we can do, is pick ourselves up and soldier on,
For the enemy we loathe shall regret what they have done,
We did not deserve,
We did nothing wrong,
We celebrated and thanked only the day before.
And then were we targeted as we all knew would happen,
One day or another; we could not think we were immune.

But nothing, could prepare us for a day like that day,
The tragedy and devastation is apparent in us all,
But nothing can stop us,
From holding our